四六级作文决胜在于创造闪光点（一）

　　高分作文标志

　　1：120-150字；150-180字；

　　2、是否长短句交叉；

　　3、用词是否恰当，准确，形象，尽量使用能够吸引阅卷老师眼球的闪光词；

　　4、关键词是否换用，切勿老用重复词；

　　下面给出写好一篇作文的注意事项：

　　1.适当用被动代替主动，这样能更客观的反映事实, 句子开头不要总是用we / I (比如写结尾时不用we should pay attention to而用Attention should be paid to. )举个经典结尾2004年六月六级作文的最后一段：It is, therefore, high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry like that. Thus， its competitive edge will be sharpened effectively.

　　2.善于使用插入语，比如说把副词、连接词等，作插入语放在中间，一般放在主语、动词或者助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。

　　如however / therefore /for example/I believe 做插入语放在中间，一般放在动词，助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。

　　比如说： Other individuals, however, take the attitude that …

　　3. 一定要学会换词，换形象，具体的代替太宽泛的。(考试中一般不要出现good, bad , many, thing, think,

　　people, opinion 等等)比如上面例子中，applicable代替proper, approaches代替ways, implement代替carry out, sharpen one's competitive edge代替enhance one's competitiveness(提高某物竞争力)

　　下面举一篇一位同学写的优秀作文(14分)的例子，看看他是如何运用各类写作技巧的。这位同学把老师上课讲的各类写作手法和精彩替换和句型都用上了，作文有了很大的提高。

　　Computer and I

　　By Simmy

　　I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself in googling an army of useful information I had expected, and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.

　　exceedingly 替换 very

　　thrilling 替换 exciting

　　sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb 替换 sb. be interested in sth.

　　google 替换 search

　　an army of 替换 a lot of

　　The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say we have been submerged by them, in large measure!

　　The dawn of the new century witnessed 是一个精彩句型，用来描述在某个时期发生了什么事情；

　　Increasing popularity 替换 more and more popular

　　Coincident with … 非常地道的词汇，表达"与…一致"的意思，替换 With …

　　Advancement 替换 development

　　Pour into ( flood into / swarm into )替换 enter into

　　Current ( currently )替换 now

　　Appeal to sb. 替换 sb. be interested in sth.

　　Growing individuals 替换 more and more people

　　It is no exaggeration to say 经典句型， 说某事是毫不夸张的

　　For a start, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment . Little by little, our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.

　　For a start 替换 To begin with

　　We can, freely, search 用了插入语的写作手法

　　our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. 用了非常精彩的被动

　　Additionally 替换 In addition / Besides

　　Deliver 替换 send

　　There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especially the growing violence , porn pictures, AV-films emerging on the screen, which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.

　　There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, 这个句子有三个精彩之处，首先There is no denying that这个句型，还有however作为插入语， function in the disservice of 替换 do harm to

　　Emerging 代替 appearing ( fading 代替 disappearing )

　　Net citizen 网民，属于精彩用词 （编者：如果用netizen就完美了！）

　　As a classic proverb goes that no garden has no weeds. Computers do play a positive role in the development of people' lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. We should ,therefore, take advantage of the fruits and avoid the opposite facet.

　　No garden has no weeds 替换 Every coin has two sides

　　Computers do play ，do 强调

　　Positive 替换 important / good 等

　　A slice of 替换 a part of

　　Unfavorable 替换 bad

　　Impacts 替换 effects / influences

　　We should, therefore, take advantage of … 使用插入语

　　Fruits (而且fruits 用的非常形象， merits/ virtues) 替换 advantage ( defects 替换 disadvantage )

　　Facet 替换 aspect[1][]